Saturday, March 5, 2011

Change!

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton Season 2 edition 18; the eighteenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

Change the way you look;
Change the way you cook.

Change the way you talk;
Change the way you walk.

Change the way you touch and feel;
Change the way you injure and heal.

Change the way you talk to folks;
Don’t worry; sometimes you can have egg yolks.

For a change, don’t keep people in a lurch;
Once in a while, visit the church.

Ride a horse instead of a mare;
Change the world for all I care.

Change whatever others feel you mar;
Just don’t change who you really are!

 
Image courtesy: blog.mohmaya.com

PS: This marks my first attempt at writing something close to a poem. I generally write big articles and decided to write something lesser than a 100 words this time. Do let me know how this attempt fared.

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36 comments:

  1. Beautiful thoughts on change...and yes, when it comes to our own selves...we tend to take a halt...we always have to sacrifice self in the end for a change...:)

    I enjoyed your thoughts! Wish you will like my take on the subject!

    All the best!

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  2. Explained in such simplicity. Very well written Ashish Bhai

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  3. A very simplistic view of things. A nice, sweet read.

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  4. Actually very nicely written.You should definitely write more poetry.

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  5. @Meher, Fool: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    @All: Being a first attempt, I wasn't sure about how to go on about it as this is so drastically different to what I normally do... but this was good to do and probably will try and do more of it!

    @Amity: Will surely go through your take on this!

    @Mudassir, Meher: I tried to keep it simple because I cant pull off a complicated one :D

    @Fool: Will definitely try to...

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  6. Its a good attempt , good start !

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  7. @Saket: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    I do hope that it is a good start!

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  8. nice and neat.

    n agree, change is welcome in everything, except for who u really are!

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  9. Ashish, this is short sweet poem, loved it.. Smiles, mine is what most people feel in their heart but no one does Change

    Someone is Special

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  10. @BRAT: at times even that is acceptable but only at times and only for someone special! but still one shouldn't change the base reality of who they are!

    @Special: glad that you liked it!

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  11. Nice poem...The last line is really important...

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  12. @Lost in Thoughts, Geeta: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    @Lost: I too thought that the last line is the most important

    @Geeta: I am glad that you liked it!

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  13. Sometimes rhymes can enter and take away meaning and flow in a poem... this did happen in a couple of stanzas. The first 3 stanzas were galloping along rather well until the poem started getting torn apart by a fight between meaning and rhyming... it is a nice start, no doubt but you need to link thoughts with a lot of precision in a poem.

    You can overcome all this if you keep writing poetry.

    Arvind

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  14. @Arvind: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    Thanx for the honest feedback and it is something that I would take care of in the coming poems, if there are any!

    Compactness of thoughts, as required for a poem, I have to develop because I am more used to multitude of thoughts that I have for the ginormous posts that I usually write. But all feedback well accpeted.

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  15. My favorite line in your poem is ''Just don’t change who you really are!''Nice take on CHANGE.

    all the best for BAT.

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  16. Simple word and great message! But I think we keep on changing, and we should .. otherwise we would become very boring!

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  17. @Doc: That is my favorite line too... in fact, it was penned down before the poem itself got finalized

    @Aativas: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    I am glad that you liked it. I too feel that we change and we should change; sometimes voluntarily and sometimes we are forced to change. The important thing, however, is to have a certain constancy as well in our self which should anchor us... otherwise we might get lost in too many changes!

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  18. Perfect ending :) Nice thought

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  19. I will say that its definitely not that bad for a beginner.... With your persistence, it will become better and better.....

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  20. @Sadiya, ANURADHA: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more! I am glad that you guys liked it!

    @Bro: I will definitely try and make it better and better!

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  21. simple is the key... excellent article man. :D

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  22. I didn't expect you'd change so fast dude. Merely two moths and look we have a poet
    Congo

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  23. @Pramodji: Thnx for the wishes... well change is the only constant in life... ergo the title of the post!

    @Mike: I am glad that you liked it! I am glad that the first attempt was okayish... hope that the next ones are better!

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  24. Aashish Bhai what a great attempt .. really good please carry it on in the future as well along with your big articles .. ATB for BAT-18

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  25. @Vikas: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    I plan to carry a lot of both... though look out for a series of short stories that I am planning to put up on the blog soon!

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  26. Nice try that you have put in but some lines just loose there meanings as you put the words which would rhyme with the earlier..
    Very nice message at end that change the things but not yourself :)

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  27. @Alcina: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    Will surely incorporate the feedback in the next one that I will write! Glad you liked the poem!

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  28. Nice mr ashish quite good poetry.

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  29. @Shobi: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more! I am glad that you liked the poem!

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  30. @Paintball: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    That is my fav part too! I am glad that you liked the attempt!

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  31. that was sweet, like it. hope you could make a poetry when you have a new article. : )

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  32. Dude..... your first and short attempt is so nice and pretty. Might be it most attractive than your big articles. Best of luck in future.

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  33. @Diane: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more! Will certainly try to have more of poetry!

    @Helen: Thnx for the wishes. I am glad that you liked the attempt!

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  34. @Alvin, Mudanças: Welcome to the world of my Wandering Thoughts... Feel free to explore more!

    @Alvin: Well thats my philosophy...

    @Mudanças: Thats true... we are all afraid of change... and it is only though change that we have development in life!

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